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Bloom With A Smile

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A plant gives its life to produce some seeds
Overcoming insects, drought, bad soil, and weeds
And then those seeds begin to blow
Surviving animals, disease, and the cold winter's snow

On an awesome spring day, one seed finds a home
Right next to a manhole, so far it did roam
In a tiny bit of soil, this seed was planted
Not one speck of moisture did it take for granted

It scrimped and it saved the energy that it had
The intensive heat from the asphalt was so bad
And with the toxins and the exhaust from the buses and cars
It might have been better to live in the atmosphere of Mars

And yet each day it struggled, and it continued to grow
Despite being stepped on, and taking many a blow
And with the help of its friends, the sun and the rain
The little plant endured, through all of the pain

Often it thought it would be better to dry up and blow away
But the those loving friends made things better so it could stay
Its two leaves became four, and four became eight
Some days were awful, some days were just great.

And with such endurance, vigor, and vim
Some amazing happened at that manhole rim
As if to defy each destructive car that went zoom
At the top of it's short stem was a beautiful bloom

So what does that instruct us, this tenacious little plant
That even with life's pleasures and it's negative slant
And despite being planted in the worst of places
We can thrive and bloom, with a smile on our faces.
Written several years ago for a friend of mine. I just found it recently while I was packing... and decided to share it with you.
© 2009 - 2024 exarobibliologist
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First thing, I like the personification of the plant as a life, how it travels, grows and faces obstacles.

Some lines have nice flow but others appear to be too lengthy or might have flowed better if worded differently.

I like how you said the 'sun and the rain' were the plant's friends and how that, again, makes the plant seem more human.

Nice structure and how every stanza has 1-1-2-2 rhyme. The last stanza is good, a sort of 'lesson' to us, that even if it gets really bad 'we can thrive and bloom, with a smile on our faces'..

Very good piece, I reckon trying shorter lines and potentially different rhyming patterns you could get really good at it.